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Lost. . .  That’s what he was as he lay cradling the end of his severed limb.  Shaking fingers touched the cold metal that surrounded it now, keeping it safe from infection.  Tears of despair slipped from his closed lids.  Obi-Wan had warned him not to give in to the Dark side as he left Yoda.  Lost was the look in the little Jedi Master eyes as he watched the X-wing lift off and disappear into the heavy mists above.  He was going to save his friends, who were lost to undeniable pain.  Their suffering cried out to him and he was lost to the urge to go and rescue them.

Lost. . .  That was the feeling that gripped his heart when the Dark Lord stood over him and proclaimed his paternity.  Far worse than the pain of a thousand limbs being severed from him.  Inconsolable was the grievous denial that erupted from deep within his core.  With one step back he was lost to the howling winds as his body free fell to his almost certain death.  He had listened to his Mentors and not given into the rage that he was now lost to.

Lost. . .  That was the sad look in her tear-filled eyes as she tended his wounds.  He had lost her heart to another.  Soft brown eyes that once shined with fiery defiance were now dulled, veiled behind the pain of losing her love, stolen away by a helmeted mercenary.  Warm were her tears that landed on his bruised and beaten face while she sympathetically wept over the loss of his limb.   He wanted to wake from his exhausted delirium, to hold her in his arms and console her pain.  But he couldn’t for he was lost to his own painful betrayal.

“Ben. . . Why didn’t you tell me?”
Just a little drable on Luke.

This was a writing challenge that a friend of mine set me. Hope you all enjoy it. =D

Please read and let me know what you think.
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rstetradio Featured By Owner May 5, 2012
such a sad picture, he has such great facial expression
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SMH-REDELK Featured By Owner May 6, 2012
Yup, sad with a teeny tiny hint of resentment.
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NautilusL2 Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2011  Professional Digital Artist
Oh that is heartbreaking! :cry: This was wonderful.
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SMH-REDELK Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2011
Awww thank you :happycry: If you like this, I do have a Star Wars Fanfic: Corellian Pledge-Prologue. You can find it in my gallery. A lot of my Luke art are illustrations from SW-CP.
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NautilusL2 Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2011  Professional Digital Artist
That's awesome, you do art and write? I love it that Star Wars is so inspirational it causes people to make awesome art and stories :D
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Falang Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2008  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I like it ! Your text is just how I figure Luke in this tragic moment ! I have always my heart stinging when I see this scene between him and his "now-father". "L'empire contre-attaque" ("The empire strikes back" in english, I believe) is my favourite movie of the saga, especially because this very emotional end !

:+fav: ^^

PS : I like your gallery and your texts ! Keep going : I watch you now ! :sherlock:

PS 2 : sorry for my not-very-good english... -_-'
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SMH-REDELK Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2008
Aww thank you so very much for your sweet comment Falang. The Empire Strikes Back is my most favorite of the Original Star Wars Trilogy.:nod:
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Tatooine92 Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2007  Student Writer
Aww, Luke, my poor baby! I always feel so bad for him. Just the sheer pain in his voice when he whispers "Why didn't you tell me?" on board the Falcon takes me down. I can't bare to watch him suffer. :crying:
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SMH-REDELK Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2007
Yeah I know what you mean. It took me a long time and many veiwings to watch that scene with a dry eye.
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Tatooine92 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2007  Student Writer
I'm still working on being able not to turn away when he screams "Noooo!" I can't help it. It hurts me too much.
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Fring Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2005   Writer
Very nice! You bring out a lot of emotion that is lost in the movie.
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SMH-REDELK Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2005
Thanks.=D
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Nakiliel Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2005
great! so sensual! i love it!
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SMH-REDELK Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2005
:blushes: Thank you.:thanks:
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AmandaDrage Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2005
wow!!

Very strong writing, and imagery. It's very well written, no awkwardness. I like it! :D
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SMH-REDELK Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2005
:blushes: Thank you. :thanks:
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AmandaDrage Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2005
You're very welcome! :)
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redelf Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2005   Traditional Artist
yes yes yes!!!!! continue!!! Oh I have your pictures done...they suck but I will hopfully be posting them tomorrow...right now I am without internet and so I am force to pirate off my mom...:mom comes in..Hey get off my computer!!...is forced to run away and hide:
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SMH-REDELK Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2005
Thank you. I guess I will post more. I just have to see if the DA will accept a twenty page chatper. I may have to split chapters in half and I'm not sure how that will effect the flow of the story. It may not keep the readers attention. :shrug:I just don't know.:shrug:


Your drawings don't suck.:no: I am eager to see them.=D
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myrmidon-mage Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2005
I think that you should write, and post your stories more often! Not only do you have a talent for art, you have a talent for writing as well...
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SMH-REDELK Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2005
Thank you for the encouraging words.:thanks:

I'm still debating the it.
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WinterTears Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2005
Very nice. You get inside his head perfectly, a thing I find most authors fall short of when it comes to Luke. I applaud you! :clap:
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SMH-REDELK Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2005
:wow::phew: Coming from someone that likes the EU I take that as a very big compliment. Thank you. I have tried very hard, when writing Luke, Han, Leia and all the original trilogy SW characters, true to their own individual personalities.
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MaKo85 Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
*gets all bug eyes....small tears form on the rims of her eyelids*
Darth Vader: *hands a tissue*
Martina: *starts bawling like a madwoman* It's...sooo *blows nose* emotional!! *wails like a banshee*
Darth Vader:....she's been like this for a week now.....^^;
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SMH-REDELK Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2005
Oh my I wasn't expecting that.

(sends box of tissue to the Dark Lord and begs him not to sever anymore of his son's limbs)

:blushes:Well that was, Ummmm. . . encouraging. . . kind of sad but encouraging.:thanks:
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MaKo85 Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
^^;
*Vader pats her head* She's doing better now....
Martina: YESH! *hugs the Dark Lord*
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Mindscapes Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2005
Hmm, what can I say that I haven't already said? I've told you how much I loved this both in e-mail and on Fanfiction.net. What else is there to tell you? Your writing blows me away, but I've told you that too.

Post more!
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SMH-REDELK Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2005
:thanks:Thank you so much for your encouragement and support, it is greatly appreciated. :blowkiss: Still I don't know if I will truely have the nerve to post anything more (in written format that is). Posting little bits of CP to help explain my illustrations is one thing, but posting the entire story may be to daunting a task.

I know I'm being a big chicken. I can take criticism when it comes to my art and I'll be the first to point out where I feel I could have done better, but my writting. . . ? I admit that I am not as sure about that purticular ability so it's not as easy for me to absorb a hard hit on it.

Will you be posting your own SW story on your DA site when it's finished?
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Mindscapes Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2005
You're welcome.

No, my story is definitely going to be too long. Since I don't write in chapter format unless it's a novel-length piece, it won't fit on this site. It's already twenty pages in length and I'm still in the set-up part of the story. But if you haven't seen it yet, there is a preview under my scraps. It will, of course, be removed once the full piece is posted on Fanfiction.net. (If you want me to e-mail you the work-in-progress, let me know. I'd be interested in your opinion of my characterizations.)
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SMH-REDELK Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2005
Uh no, well that may be the desiding factor in me posting CP at all. How many pages in a chapter are allowed per written deviation?

You know I love your writing. You also know what I think of the last movie. Your UA can only improve my opinion of the characters. Prehaps it will help me to find some spark of feeling for them again. I have been considering an UA storyline for them as well just to get it off my mind.
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Mindscapes Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2005
DeviantArt doesn't have a chaptering process. Each chapter must be its own deviation. And I don't know how many lines of text it will take. Try posting one chapter under your scraps. If it fits, you can move it to your main gallery and then upload the rest, one chapter at a time.

I'd definitely love to see what kind of alternate universe you could come up with. Mine's a bit clichéd, but it's what I love to write.
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